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Title: The Lich
Post by: TheWhiteDove on July 22, 2019, 09:11:44 am
Name: forgotten/ unpronounceable/ unknown: Alias: The Lich

Age: over 10000 years.

Species: human originally; at one point in the far past became a human bird hybrid. Specifically that of a white dove.

Appearance : skeletal with a bird's skull for a head. Wears a flowing hooded blue robe with golden fringe that is often left open to reveal his ribs. On the back of the robe there are three golden concentric circles made up of ancient arcane symbols. In the middle of the circles is white dove holding a white rose in its besk. In the chest cavity is a black box covered in golden symbols of power arranged seemingly at random. Attached to a golden sash are another couple of black boxes. Attached to a sword belt is a jeweled long sword that has a golden rose embedded in the blade. Will often times use illusion magic when out in public. When this is done he has piercing blue eyes, jet black hair and seems to be of Arabic decent. Often has a black scepter with an orb at its head that has a white rose inside.

Affiliations: The order of the white dove, the resurrected kingdom of the white rose, The magicians council, the death company, and the troll village of Hrragrrusbrerg.

Personality: Peaceful and wise. Willing to mentor the young and the old alike. Upholds law throughout the Resurrected Kingdom of the White Rose. During battle does not hesitate to resurrect fallen enemy troops to fight for him but then after the battle he allows the troops he has resurrected to either continue serving him, go back to their families or be laid to rest. Also a bit power hungry as he seeks to conquer the entire world.

Fears: he fears that his subjects will come to hate him or that we will go mad with power. He is also afraid of his soul box being found and that he will be destroyed forever.
Ambitions: his wants to conquer the world so that he may bring it to a new age of piece and prosperity. He also seeks to eliminate all evil from the world.

Powers:
 The Lich can use something called bond magic which he learned from the shamans of Hrragrrusbrerg.

He can use illusion magic to create objects or to blend in with his surroundings or even to make it look like he is drastically changing the environment.

He is a semi skilled swordsman with a magic sword that  becomes sharper and stronger depending on how prosperous the Resurrected Kingdom of the White Rose is.

Can use necromancy to raise the dead.

The three boxes:

The box in his chest cavity includes the bones of his personal guard.

His personal guard was made up of ten trolls. These trolls were about twelve feet tall and had the strength of ten men. They also wield gigantic banded clubs made of wood from ironwood trees.






Bond Magic: Bond magic allows it's user to create bonds with creatures and people. This allows them to feel what the other feels and viseversa. Bond magic even allows to user to send power to the one they are bonded with via well the bond. This can be something as simple as adding extra strength or allowing one to cast magic when normally they could not, or something as complicated as preventing one from dying due to mortal wounds. This can stack if multiple people send strength to one person such as a nerd suddenly gaining the strength of ten men. Bonds can be strengthened over time or weaken depending on how much trust is between the two that are bonded. So the stronger the bond the more power that can be sent through it. Bond magic also has a severe downside. If one of the two people or creatures bonded to one another true to manipulate the bond itself through magic the bond with instantly snap killing both people the bond was connecting. Bonds exist in everyone. Bond magic just allows the bond to become a real force that can connect people like never before. It also is an indicator of who is trying to manipulate who and is useful for uncovering information or catching criminals.
Title: Re: The Lich
Post by: Crank on July 23, 2019, 10:39:49 pm
I feel that you might have too much going on.  I mean, he's a 10,000 year old half bird detective set on world domination, who's also a king, strategist and general.  Peaceful and wise seem to conflict with destroy all evil, especially with how hard a line 'all' is.  Is this like, a Daenerys type character?  I feel like this is several different characters, and that they'd be more interesting broken up
Title: Re: The Lich
Post by: TheWhiteDove on July 24, 2019, 09:01:06 am
well it kind is supposed to be a complex character trust me once I get the story out it will make sense, I mean I have been working on this guy for a couple years now. plus yes I will condense this down once it is finished. this is just what I am putting down for now.
Title: Re: The Lich
Post by: Pleb with a Pen on July 28, 2019, 05:07:05 am
First of all, better use spoilers. Since this is only going to increase in volume, it will become tiring to have to read a text wall. Aside from a few grammar mistakes here and there, you have managed to convey your character pretty well(something which I can't to this day).

However, like Crank said, there might be too much going on with him. There isn't necessarily a problem with having a complex character, and everything making sense in his story is to be expected; the problem is, this might not work in the fighting system. As far as I can tell, your character is one of the strongest among those who are already here. Both your character's strength and complexity may make it hard for people to write a believable scenario and have their character beat yours alike.

All in all, this feals more like a protagonist in a story, rather than a gladiator; especially if you are gonna add more to him.
Title: Re: The Lich
Post by: TheWhiteDove on July 29, 2019, 01:16:53 am
Quote from: Pleb with a Pen on July 28, 2019, 05:07:05 amFirst of all, better use spoilers. Since this is only going to increase in volume, it will become tiring to have to read a text wall. Aside from a few grammar mistakes here and there, you have managed to convey your character pretty well(something which I can't to this day).

However, like Crank said, there might be too much going on with him. There isn't necessarily a problem with having a complex character, and everything making sense in his story is to be expected; the problem is, this might not work in the fighting system. As far as I can tell, your character is one of the strongest among those who are already here. Both your character's strength and complexity may make it hard for people to write a believable scenario and have their character beat yours alike.

All in all, this feals more like a protagonist in a story, rather than a gladiator; especially if you are gonna add more to him.


for spoilers yes I will use them I need to finish the character first and second he is going to be a glass cannon like to the point of a rock thrown at him will bring him down. I thought about how strong he is and then thought you know what lets make this guy be so weak that he needs to rely on his spawned minions if he ever wants a chance to even fight. and I may have taken some of the weaknesses from Skyrim's really weak skeletons and yes I have been watching the overlord anime a lot recently but this guy came before lol
Title: Re: The Lich
Post by: That one guy from earlier on July 29, 2019, 10:06:47 am
His powers are much too powerful sir. First of all, there's no counter or way to avoid/remove binding magic. But on top of that, he's a master illusionist, a necromancer, and has ten trolls to guard him. Any of these abilities could be ones that a character could be built around or could work on their own with minor side abilities (I believe my character's ally predominately uses illusions in fact). But all of them make the character able to absolute take him down.

Put it this way. Can you see any other gladiator reasonably being able to beat him?

His personality doesn't quite make sense either since you're trying to convey that he's peaceful but is also a conquerer. Like, if he were once a conquerer but came to regret it or if he were once peaceful but changed, I would get it. But he can't be two opposites at the same time. That needs an explanation as well.
Title: Re: The Lich
Post by: TheWhiteDove on September 05, 2019, 02:06:58 pm
You know what I am going to change this guy completely but first I need to worry about real life stuff. I'll finish him but put him as a side note in the actual fighters " profile" if that is alright