SMF - Just Installed!
Started by TheWhiteDove, July 22, 2019, 09:11:44 am
Quote from: Pleb with a Pen on July 28, 2019, 05:07:05 amFirst of all, better use spoilers. Since this is only going to increase in volume, it will become tiring to have to read a text wall. Aside from a few grammar mistakes here and there, you have managed to convey your character pretty well(something which I can't to this day).However, like Crank said, there might be too much going on with him. There isn't necessarily a problem with having a complex character, and everything making sense in his story is to be expected; the problem is, this might not work in the fighting system. As far as I can tell, your character is one of the strongest among those who are already here. Both your character's strength and complexity may make it hard for people to write a believable scenario and have their character beat yours alike. All in all, this feals more like a protagonist in a story, rather than a gladiator; especially if you are gonna add more to him.